Month: December 2009

Another weekday show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YJdcfeUPW8I

0m21s The previous comic spent 3 minutes preaching about the virtues of anal

0m46s He said “not that she knows”

1m17s This is great

1m28s I don’t usually have the audience clap, but I thought this was the best way to transition from crowd work to material in this instance

3m15s I don’t need to say “my family isn’t happy I’m in comedy” I can go straight to introducing my mom’s line

3m58s I put too much emphasis on the word “all”

5m11s Not a terrible callback to previous crowd work, but it could’ve been stronger

5m29s Good job milking the sadness

5m44s I hate getting tongue tied

Overall: This was a very solid set. Finding out the guy stalked his girlfriend of seven years and milking that fact for the first minute was a lot of fun and helped get everyone in the moment. It was great that I was getting stronger and stronger laughs the longer I kept going.

This is a Wednesday show for about 20 people, including 14 lumberjacks from Maine

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Um9R2OlWzLo

0m12s This is a comment on the previous comic’s material and response

0m18s It took 3 lines of comments to get a huge laugh on this topic

1m05s The slower I go, the more laughs it gets

2m10s I tried changing the order of the Russian family material

3m29s Look sad for another second

4m30s I should only do the suicide joke after a joke where I kill

4m55s I lost the crowd, although calling them out on it helped for half a second

5m22s I need to say this in more of a question tone

5m48s I couldn’t help that one, it did get a laugh

6m10s Nice “forehead sweat” response

6m29s Get rid of the word “are”

7m28s I need to know to get out of this joke if the first couple of lines don’t hit

7m58s I should’ve tried the old “I’ll leave you on something funny… thank you”

Overall: I did better than I remember doing. I started really strong and ended really poorly, but was getting consistent laughs for 7 of 8 minutes. I need more material that makes me vulnerable because when one of my “edgier” jokes doesn’t hit, I can’t go to another edgy joke, as it’ll really lose the crowd. (This is what happened when I went from suicidal girls to jdate to new years.)

This is me MCing an open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dKi-zzp1BgM

0m24s I’m not being conversational right now

0m38s No need for the “heaven” tag

0m50s But I’m still gonna do it

1m20s The efficiency joke needs to be tried on a real audience

1m45s I think the “we fight injured children” might work better as a sketch for a bad grammar advertising agency

2m04s That’s just a premise about mutual enemies, I need an actual joke there

2m52s It’s less wordy to say “When drinking gets in the way of your job, so you quit work”

3m09s I need a long pause between “neuroeconomics” and “I don’t know what the hell that means either”

3m32s Going too fast for this whole skit

4m08s This joke needs work, I haven’t been able to practice my material out loud because I’m couch surfing

4m45s There’s a funnier way to get that same house dad point across

5m02s I decided to do one joke I know works to see the maximum laughs I could get, this isn’t really a useful strategy for the end of a set

6m04s I could’ve done this slower, paused and gotten a laugh

Overall: I could’ve probably addressed the comics hating me and waiting for me to get off stage less often. The threesome efficiency joke is ready to be tried on a real audience and the fighting injured children bit needs to become a sketch instead of stand up.

A Tuesday show for a crowd of 11

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ghgtVpDVDEU

1m01s One of these days I’m gonna get random audience members to make out during my set

1m06s I couldn’t do my regular “don’t try (insert dating service)” cause it would’ve been mean given how she looked, so I tried to save it by adding more words

1m14s I setup my suicide joke here, but it was too early to go to it, so the transition was a little weird

2m25s Do the mouse click slower and more dramatically

3m00s I held back here. My first instinct was to ask “have you done it yet” and then enquire about her fake rack. It would’ve also made sense to ask how they met here, suggesting a site like “sugar daddies and big boobs dot com” because of how they looked and then going into my online dating joke.

3m30s I tried changing the order of the Russian family stuff here and it led to me stumbling over the premises

4m28s I love the single applause clap

5m44s Admitting it’s messed up lets me get away with going further, I learned that in improv

7m08s I still don’t have a good response for when someone hasn’t spayed their dog

7m43s My hand should be out in a “presenting” way, not in a double pump motion

Overall: This was the first time in a while where my material did well but my improvised crowd work didn’t. I think this was because I didn’t go with my first instinct in a couple of moments as I decided my instincts were too mean. Also, changing the order of the Russian Family joke makes sense but I need to make it smoother.

This is the Sunday Writer’s Mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BvbGqeogZhQ

0m11s I thought that line would hit a lot harder as it was a reference to the previous comic

0m33s Photos and video of me being a trannie coming shortly

0m53s I should smile after that

0m57s Someone said “that’s pretty good”

1m06s He said something about “validation”

1m09s That was mean, but not “ooooo” mean, I was just ready to move on

1m37s I might need to tighten that to “Take out the for and you get “we fight injured children””

2m05s I need to say “If I impregnate someone” not “if I do that”

2m23s I thought house daddy was good, the delivery wasn’t right though

2m45s I need to think of better act outs and follow ups but I like the concept of “mutual enemies”

3m23s I didn’t deliver “I don’t know what the hell that means either” right as I’m trying to rush the first two parts that everyone knows to get to the last part

4m05s It’s really hard to say “tetrahedral carbon crystal”

4m18s It should be “commencing” not “consuming”

4m28s I need to change the explanation and add that I had to google “tetrahedral carbon crystal”

4m52s I think that’s funny

Overall: Not a great set. This was mostly brand new material that I didn’t even get a chance to practice out loud before getting on stage. These jokes all need to be worked and reworked but none of them missed completely enough for me to remove it right away.