Another day, another show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=78Jt_rJvqJ4
0m35s Say “tennis” in a more flat tone
1m58s The premise could be tightened
2m04s Get rid of “Ringlish” line
3m18s No need to say “fail math” twice
4m16s Change body positions when doing a different character, to make it more obvious
5m44s Unfortunately they didn’t jump me as cougars after the show
Overall: I worked out a lot of newer jokes and parts of each one got laughs, so I just need to rework and tighten them
Two Saturday nights in a row where I only did one show, it’s nice to get paid occasionally 🙂
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9CjWzvIFTxk
0m56s Someone in the audience said “it’s true” so I repeated it and got a bigger laugh than usual
2m06s The eyes moving around confused are what get the big laughs on this punch line
2m27s Instead of “get out of it” it should be “how you break up online”
3m07s If I waited another second, the rest of the audience would’ve gotten it
4m35s Great instantaneous reaction
6m10s I shouldn’t repeat that line
6m27s Nice response by the audience member
6m47s Get rid of the “first of all” and “second of all” part
7m36s Say “I don’t mean to give the game away” more slyly
7m48s I should’ve said “who’d you cuddle, my mom?”
Overall: Pretty good set, but I need to tighten the “toy boy” part of the joke
