Performance Critique: June 19

Saturday 8pm show

2m42s Get rid of “the wine”

2m46s Don’t make “would you let Jesus shave you?” into a question, make it into a statement

3m41s Just say “I’ll wave my hand till you laugh”

4m10s I can stop after “weight of failed expectations” no need for “for son”

4m39s Not a strong enough of a punch

6m20s Need a better punch than “straight jacket”

Part 2

Overall: Good ten minute set, especially since I’m still figuring out a bunch of these jokes.

Saturday 8pm show

2m42s Get rid of “the wine”

2m46s Don’t make “would you let Jesus shave you?” into a question, make it into a statement

3m41s Just say “I’ll wave my hand till you laugh”

4m10s I can stop after “weight of failed expectations” no need for “for son”

4m39s Not a strong enough of a punch

6m20s Need a better punch than “straight jacket”

Part 2

Overall: Good ten minute set, especially since I’m still figuring out a bunch of these jokes.