The Sunday Writer’s Mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_VBd_6cCWXw
0m31s Decent one liner
0m40s I should deadpan the delivery more and emphasis “never”
0m58s Say “partners” instead of “hookups”
1m04s No need for the word “array”
1m24s Beers aren’t girly enough, make it cosmos or martinis
2m01s Turn and look at the audience in shock
2m37s Slow down, and stop after “half price”
3m27s Don’t smile at this line
4m22s Not sure I like this joke although it got laughs
Overall: The one liners at the start are good, the yelp joke and shoes joke needs to be a lot tighter but there’s potential. I don’t think I’m gonna keep the dominos joke, at least not in it’s current form.
