A bar show for 8 people

0m43s Sound more playful with it

1m04s Should’ve done crowd work leading into the next bit when it’s this dead

3m05s The old “if good material isn’t hitting, let’s do new material” trick

3m56s Work on that act out

4m58s Play off the heroin more since that got the biggest laugh

Overall: Horrible set that never got going anywhere. At least I said a newer joke in front of an audience.

An 8pm show

3m44s Rewrite the phone charger bit

4m54s Cut the horny line (and watch my videos quicker, so I don’t have to write this same note twenty times)

5m53s Good job acknowledging something that happened and leading it into a bit

6m58s Hit “monster” harder

Overall: Weak set. Should’ve tried some save lines.

An afternoon fundraiser

0m33s Should’ve tried commenting on the room a little more

2m18s Hit “being” harder

2m45s Get more negative body language for “I see most of you are on her side”

4m22s Nice improvised line about “the Friendly’s staff”

5m41s Smile on the “awww”

6m19s Sell the “yeah right” look for longer

10m13s I should have a stock bit for when someone doesn’t have a safe word

10m59s Nice little improvised line

Overall: Ok for an afternoon set, but a lot of the jokes need shortening.

The 10pm show

0m53s I can add “and there’s more potheads than hairdressers” but they may take away from the momentum

3m55s Phone charger stuff is clearly weaker than the rest

5m36s Cut the horny line

6m41s Fun little crowd work prediction

7m08s Say “this is why” not “that’s why”

8m05s Take the extra two seconds to put the mic back in and set it up properly

Overall: Strong set but the phone charger bit needs fixing or removing

The 8pm show

2m30s Pause a little after “dad had aisle” as it sometimes gets a laugh

4m08s I happened to do the kissy face to a flamboyantly gay gentleman, it made it extra funny

4m33s Rushed back into the bit for no reason

6m20s Cut the horny line

8m01s Have a slightly slower realization of “oh not you guys”

8m55s First time that callback got an applause break

Overall: Great set with big laughs throughout.