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Comedy Critique 37: Feb 25

This was an open mic with 2 audience members.

 

0m18s I don’t actually hate jews. And I am a jew. I was just playing with tension. 

0m31s I need to deliver this differently… I’m still figuring out the how… and maybe I should use the word “scared” instead of “concerned” when starting this joke, even if they’re not. 

2m55s I rushed the delivery. 

3m54s It doesn’t get any more wordy than “That is not how we educate our childrens youth about what not to do.” Something like “There’s a better way to set an example for kids” would be easier on the brain. 

6m15s For some reason I’ve been getting tongue twisted recently with “I think she was overestimating”, I have no idea why. 

7m17s Things go wrong in threes… 

7m44s I was only talking about comedy technique because the only 2 audience members were new comics who just hadn’t heard my material yet, I’d never go into it if there was a real audience there. 

9m58s I have a second video that goes on for another 20 seconds but it’s not worth making this post longer for it. 

Overall: This was good stage time. The newer stuff needs more practice.

Comedy Critique 36: Feb 24

I hosted an open mic after a Mardi Gras party that had about 10 people in the audience. I pulled in the 4 chatty girls that are sitting up front. That’s 9 overly engaged audience members in a row.

 

1m32s The subway joke works best if I first beatbox while I grind the pole, then go into my crazy voice for the second time. 

2m18s There was no need to finish my subway joke at that point. 

3m56s When I asked if purple held special significance, I was thinking about making a Barney the Dinosaur joke, but decided against it because the girl was a little chubby… 

4m48s I hope I haven’t scarred you, my reader. 

4m58s I should again repeat that she’s on it, and heighten by saying she’s the number one rated dater or something. 

5m51s This is the second time someone has mentioned a dead or dying dog. I still don’t have a good way to address this and am open to suggestions. 

5m55s Accusing them of lying is not a good way to go about it.

PART 2

 

1m03s Great job calling out what just happened. When I was watching this video I thought “I hope I said something about that “yeaaaah”” 

1m23s She bought me a shot so I drank and introduced people

PART 3

 

0m38s Funny cause its true

1m20s I should’ve replied to the comment of “they’re both fruity drinks”. 

Overall: I did okay hosting but had a talk with the owner later about how to be a better host. You can find that post here. I plan on using these tips and being a better host next time I do it. 

Comedy Critique 35: Feb 22

This is my regular Sunday open mic. Usually it’s just comics, but this time there were 4 or 5 actual audience members.

 

0m24s I wanted to try almost all new material, so I decided to go with one of my most reliable jokes to start the set 

1m01s Change the word order so the punchline is at the end “Instead of George Washington, I’d rather be Tom Collins.” 

1m25s If anyone laughs when I say “because my comedy career is going places” it could be funny to stop, turn to them surprised, and say “Wow you’re a dick.” 

2m05s My BigBenComedy.com jokes needs to be rewritten to be much shorter, or funnier. 

2m21s I need to follow up “it wasn’t my girlfriend” with “it was the girl with a boyfriend who I hooked up with last week” 

2m51s If I practiced explaining what happened more, then this might actually be funny. 

3m23s I keep looking down and to the chair because that’s where I put my notes. 

3m49s I should commit to this bit even more and go more over the top. A white boy like me trying to rap is hysterical in a “laughing at you” way. 

Overall: Most of the newer jokes have promise, they just need to be reworked. Otherwise, the set was decent. I don’t always get a chance to practice my new material outloud before getting on stage and I need to work on not letting that happen.

Comedy Critique 34: Feb 21B

This show had about 12 audience members and the five most disruptive that were up front were all the people I had managed to pull in off the street. They weren’t nasty hecklers or anything, just a little overly interactive especially with some of the comics before me… 


1m53s I need to think of a way to use this as part of my routine. Something like, “There’s two types of people, those who love their dogs, and those who look at em and say, “Hey, at least they get fed.” 

2m01s From their nervous laughter about kids locked in the basement, I should’ve kept going with this, asking them about their malnourished children and such. 

2m25s Many times a small response to a heckle is more effective than a big blow up. Everyone behaved themselves from this point on. 

2m44s I need to keep my hand out there longer 

4m48s Emphasis should be on “snuggle slut” not on the word “the” 

Overall: I think I did a good job with the small crowd and not getting thrown off by the audience interactions

Performance Critique 33: Feb 21a

This is a paying audience at the place where I bark. I think there were about 10 people in the crowd.

0m32s I don’t need to say “most people get into stand up because…” I can just go straight into why I got into it.

1m27s I need to hold my hand out there for 2 seconds after I finish my line.

1m38s I need to go to my punchline before the audience member can respond, or else the punch gets flattened. I also shouldn’t have ignored his comment. I thought that would work because a different time I responded then went on with my joke and it didn’t work out so well. I think the best way to do it next time is to address the situation then go back by saying “I guess you weren’t laughing a minute ago because you love sweaters.”

1m56s I think the “dot com” after “puppies for yuppies” is a failed experiment. People either get the joke or they don’t.

3m30s The teenager in the front row was making like he was a pimp. I did the best I could with a reaction.

3m42s While saying “this joke will bomb” got a laugh, the actual joke didn’t because I communicated it wasn’t funny. Next time I should play it up, like, “since it doesn’t happen to you, this will be even funnier.”

5m04s I could get rid of the line “I’ve been dating around and”. Just start with “I met a new dating personality…”

5m30s If the audience member replies with a “yes I have”, I should phrase my next line in the form of a question: “Isn’t that so demasculating?”

5m50s Pause for a second or two after “fan base” to try to draw out one last laugh.

Overall: A true professional comic would’ve been able to make this small dispersed crowd laugh their heads off. I’m not that level yet but I didn’t bomb either. There’s also room for me to tighten up some jokes and plenty of ways to improve my crowd work.

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