3m05s Good to start laughing on “didn’t make it” makes it less harsh

3m15s Great improvised bit

3m57s Nice call back to improvised stuff

5m26s Good job “reacting” to the one audible “hmm”

7m48s Not a bad line to put in, “now that we’re all friends, let’s do some therapy”

10m07s More emphasis on “real”

10m56s Stepped on the laugh a little, but I was trying to finish before all the checks get dropped

Overall: Great set. My material hit really strong and I improvised and played with the crowd. The birthday stuff at the end was a little too heavy/sad at times, I should play with way to make it funnier and less sad.

0m22s Nice going straight into crowd work

3m58s I did four straight minutes before going into material, I feel that’s a new record for me

4m44s Look up higher and don’t tilt head down while doing the confused face

5m34s Could’ve made fun of the guys lack of answer after his friend gave a good answer instead

6m20s Could’ve asked more info about the late people

7m10s Could’ve made up some stuff about what he was texting

10m19s Give it another half beat after “they’re not all drunks”

11m44s Go into the need therapy in a funnier way, or keep asking her about the most messed up cases

13m24s Don’t say “that one’s for me” 3 times in one set

14m22s Try to rephrase “then I turns into, oh I wanna be independent, but together”

Doing time between comics

0m20s Pause between each of her words as it’s supposed to be a little kid

0m52s Sell the “oh it’s okay” stronger

1m34s Say “I can’t get married either” first or something, it’s weird where I went into the joke

3m24s Don’t stumble on the words, but at least I acknowledged it

5m23s Hit “emergency” more sarcastically

Overall: Great job with the crowd work up front and not forcing material. The response to material was up and down but I did a good job as host getting to know the audience, being friendly, high energy and interacting with them.

2m54s Change delivery between “aisle” and “baggage check”

7m21s Don’t go up on “contract year”

Overall: Low consistent laughs throughout.

0m52s More emphasis on “someone”

1m10s Get better posture, neck is too far forward

1m25s I can add “I didn’t even know the internet had other websites”

3m59s Say “it’s called the contract year” before “imagine how good marriages would be in a contract year.”

4m48s Add “accidently” before started

5m34s Change “twelve” to “ten” for less syllables

Overall: Decent for checks

0m14s Might not need to acknowledge this

0m51s More emphasis on “someone”

4m49s Good to pick one or two specific people for the batteries line

6m01s Good improvised response and good idea to ask about how long someone’s been married to go back into the bit

7m13s Say someone instead of something

7m51s I forgot a couple of lines about “if you’re lucky, life, you have a couple good orgasms then you die… Have I depressed everyone yet?” but it still sorta made sense

9m25s Harsher on “maybe”

14m03s Hit the UofP harder, like “I guess you went to…”

15m10s Smile on “basement”

15m55s Spin the media should be after bribe the jury

18m10s Weird fun interaction

18m28s Fun Q&A I guess

19m04s Compromise should go before flexible

19m27s Saying “alright” is a funny way to go into safe word

20m31s Try to have my eyes open wider when doing the grandpa character to differentiate it from the mom

21m17s Hold the smile after each line until the laughs die down, otherwise I might be stopping the laughs cause they’re waiting for the next line

21m58s I can cut the candle part

22m46s Hold for an extra half second

Overall: Great long set. I was relaxed and had fun and the material flowed.

5m53s It got enough laughs that I didn’t need to acknowledge the second round of laughs

Overall: Consistent laughs throughout, but they could’ve been stronger.

1m30s Good misinterpretation on her “excuse me”

1m51s Milk the circle motion for longer if it’s getting laughs

3m57s State that it’s called a contract year

5m03s I accidentally did this bit instead of the cell phones like marriages bit, but it actually helps break up the anti-marriage material

6m04s Have the mic in the stand before doing the one liner

Overall: Solid short set, although you can’t tell from this audio version

2m43s Pointed at a guy that was way too old to be playing Halo

5m45s Funny how they called me nerdy before I got to it

7m07s Doing this joke without doing mom act outs first is weird

7m43s Make kissing sounds

Overall: Eh. I did my smarter material on purpose and it got laughs but not huge laughs.

2m59s Instead of “it’s gonna get sadder” could’ve gone “no, it’s okay because I was actually happy about it…”

3m32s Make one of the voices masculine

4m53s Don’t put hand over face

6m52s Good that I’m trying to write on stage, even if it’s not funny

8m05s Add “I’m like” first

Overall: Mediocre set but I did a good job rolling with the punches and trying to write on stage.

1m15s Lean in harder with the mic stand

1m20s Pause longer after “I don’t pander”

5m10s Tighten this and pick one specific person for the batteries line

5m34s Do better crowd work if asking a question

Overall: Mediocre. The first two minutes went fine then I spent 4 minutes talking about why marriages are stupid. Maybe I shouldn’t start with that material two minutes into a set.