www.youtube.com/watch?v=z1xnuB6A-4w

1m56s Great call back to improvised material

5m40s That’s a good line

6m10s Good adjustment to the glass breaking

7m12s I should’ve said, “this is like one of those ink blots”

8m22s That’s funny, I should repeat that

9m25s This is a fun set, I should be like this every time I’m on stage

Part 2

www.youtube.com/watch?v=uK2HSLyVHTY

4m35s An interruption during a list destroys the punch line

5m17s Good job adjusting to that

5m37s Nice save

6m54s Rephrase to “little known fact, if you donate a corpse to science, they’ll pick up the body”

7m26s I can try to take it even further by adding, “can I borrow some lube?”

Part 3

www.youtube.com/watch?v=hAbg5IZy0tA

0m54s This is a 3am only joke

4m13s Funny

5m03s Good job milking this for literally 12 seconds, I should always milk it like this

6m02s And the bartender has started to play with my camera, bad zooms to ensue

8m05s I can start singing the Destiny’s Child “I’m a survivor” song…

Part 4

www.youtube.com/watch?v=1ayu1LyOWXw

1m08s Good line

4m16s This joke is a lot funnier with a zoom in on my eyes

Overall: I did 35 minutes without any notes and had a lot of fun. Sure I only did like 15 minutes of actual jokes in there, but I was really relaxed and everyone was laughing.  I need to learn how to copy my delivery in this venue to everywhere else I perform.

www.youtube.com/watch?v=gk8-VhZpPYc

3m27s Good improvised line / flirtation

Part 2

www.youtube.com/watch?v=cyTUd_u-QP8

1m57s Try making this into a one liner that’s delivered like a throw away

3m07s Kill the “hategasm” line and reword the ending of the joke

3m27s Yes that’s too far

4m40s Try to keep a straight face on that line

7m59s Don’t step on the laugh

Part 3

www.youtube.com/watch?v=84DL_TSulSs

0m15s If I stumble on a word, stumble for longer to make it fun

3m23s Throw in another line to keep punching it. After “I’m a pimp, I won’t do that” I can throw in “If someone tried that on me, I’d throw her out the house”

4m01s Add “and I was like” before “Everyone in New York”

Overall: Not great, but I had fun with the tiny crowd and did 25 minutes. I need stop over acknowledging when things aren’t going great. And I also need to keep my internal thought processes to myself instead of explaining the psychology behind jokes.

www.youtube.com/watch?v=EWsyJITNDnY

0m49s Get rid of “all you need is a bed”

2m27s Kill the “hategasm” tag

5m01s Kill the “lottery ticket” tag

Overall: Working out material at a mic

www.youtube.com/watch?v=BIN1Z3XYj8o

0m29s Hold the “what the hell” look for longer

1m12s Figure out a way to stay in the spotlight while doing the act out

2m45s Sell the modeling poses more

3m17s Change “Elton” back to “Jesus”

4m20s Pause for another half second after “Ugh, mom”

5m38s Rephrase from “drag people off the streets” that’s confusing

6m46s Say “he booked me here tonight” more playfully

7m38s This show asks that everyone performs a Haiku

Overall: Decent but some bits hit a lot harder than others, and I should never write poetry.

www.youtube.com/watch?v=Omu1C0iCxfQ

1m00s I should do roasts

3m49s Good job being in the moment and realizing what I did and then calling it out

4m45s Go back to the handjob motion for this, maybe wave before doing it first

Overall: Good job the first minute addressing the situation in the room and making fun of what happened earlier. Combining the yelp and Netflix jokes makes sense, but needs to be worded a little better.

www.youtube.com/watch?v=Iy6VVnw9PH4

0m26s Say “Hey girls” before that line

1m07s Hold the “what the fuck look” for longer

5m17s Remove word “your”

5m54s Drop down lower on the fake donkey

7m11s Do a stronger act out

7m51s Good job going along with the word stumble

8m10s Get rid of the Zeus inc tag

8m49s Good call back

9m33s Great crowd work, as usual good improvised crowd work gets bigger laughs than any material

Part 2

www.youtube.com/watch?v=O1Og1wOF5Is

3m14s Sell the “what the hell” look harder

5m28s No need for “that’s bullshit”

Overall: Respectable set, the crowd work went over really well, I just gotta figure out how to do that consistently.

www.youtube.com/watch?v=_ru-EfM9Zsc

2m37s Do more poses

3m04s Change “Fabio” to “Jesus”

3m48s Get rid of “your” in the sentence

4m03s Shorten “when did” to “when’d”

5m19s I need a stronger save if this joke doesn’t hit because it is a political joke

Overall: Except for the junkie actor joke I did well, especially considering it was 2.5 hours into the show

www.youtube.com/watch?v=5DPA-12h_40

0m43s Fix this tag, there’s potential but it’s not fully clear

2m22s Pause for another half second, they might eventually get it

3m09s “Elton” doesn’t work, go back to “Jesus”

3m51s Change “ask me” to “wonder”

4m22s End the response after “I love that Donkey”

4m43s Good line

5m00s Act out the guy

5m50s At least I cut this joke done from 2:30 to 1:00, but it’s still not working

9m25s This joke is clearer weaker than the other jokes

Part 2

www.youtube.com/watch?v=d_hrENo2to8

0m32s Be careful to say the same line of “nobody believes me” and not “no one believes me”

Overall: Lost part of the crowd in the middle when checks came out but I got them back towards the end.

www.youtube.com/watch?v=NTtSCgyfFTw

0m43s Point first, then say the line

1m01s Not a great tag

2m52s Change heroin to alcohol or something more believable

Overall: Decent for working out new material

www.youtube.com/watch?v=32HnAEkUbnI

0m44s Change the hair dryer and gun line

3m36s Be more expressive on “let Jesus shave you”

4m34s I can end the act out on “I love that Donkey”

5m30s I might be able to get rid of the line “and then Jewel screwed me over”

6m21s Combine this into one line, “Zeus Inc booked me here tonight”

7m55s Good job dealing with the phone going off

Overall: Decent but not great.