A 4pm show

2m18s Don’t look down on “I hate delta”

3m16s Don’t pause before “of sadness”

3m32s I can smile during this part

3m48s Needs a better punch line than “like your name”

5m01s Cut the horny line

5m40s Give the “yeah right” face for longer and harder

Overall: Solid set but the laughs missed in a few lines.

Closing out the 10pm show, 2+ hours in

1m28s I didn’t hear the “CNN” comment or I would’ve addressed it

4m22s Pause for another half second before doing a titty squeeze

5m53s Could’ve played with the comment more

6m48s Decent side commentary line

Overall: Eh, not great. Had to deal with a lot of talking.

Doing checks during the 8pm show

0m21s Don’t open with this, there’s nowhere to go if it misses

3m40s Good job addressing the talking

4m12s Blink eyelids more

Overall: Good for checks

Late night music mic

4m08s Rewrite the previous minute

5m16s To streamline it, if someone else yells out a safe word, they can become the new sadness member of the audience

6m27s Need a better punch line

7m00s Try saying the dead lines while smiling

Overall: Mediocre. Worked out a bunch of rewrites, that still need rewrites.

A bar show for 8 or 10 people

0m32s Could’ve gone with “so only one of you lays pipe in Thailand”

2m54s Say “some of you” instead of “a few of you”

3m18s If going from “Russian prison camp” to Blade, I can repeat the word “prison”

3m42s Move the eyes around more

4m48s Weird angle of leaning towards him

Overall: Weak set. I tried crowd work up front but should’ve gone back into it later on.