Sunday writer’s mic

0m20s Awkward pauses are funny

0m40s Instead of “do a joke about this” say “talk about this on stage”

0m58s Say “send guys to Ben’s new camp”, I missed “guys” in that setup

1m34s Don’t do the baby spleen crack analogy, HD TV is stronger

2m35s I need to start this joke with almost getting run over by a jogger

2m53s Make it more of a rock song than a rap song

Overall: Worked out some newer jokes, some have potential but they need more work

Saturday 8pm show

2m42s Get rid of “the wine”

2m46s Don’t make “would you let Jesus shave you?” into a question, make it into a statement

3m41s Just say “I’ll wave my hand till you laugh”

4m10s I can stop after “weight of failed expectations” no need for “for son”

4m39s Not a strong enough of a punch

6m20s Need a better punch than “straight jacket”

Part 2

Overall: Good ten minute set, especially since I’m still figuring out a bunch of these jokes.

Friday night show

0m55s Pause another second before “maybe”

2m43s Don’t add “the wine”

5m11s Instead of “do that” say “make a website like that for”

6m46s Funny improvised statement

7m36s The biggest laugh was when it wasn’t material

7m56s Checking getting dropped towards the end of my set

Overall: Decent but not great. It started out stronger than it ended.

A show at a Hostel, with a mostly international crowd

3m55s I need a different end to this joke

4m16s I don’t need to verify this that much

7m53s Milk the “eye fucking” line for longer

Overall: Solid set, but the Jewel joke isn’t getting enough laughs throughout the bit.

An afternoon open mic

1m35s I didn’t set up this joke enough, it doesn’t make sense

4m14s Not sure if that’s too far

4m22s At least I admit it

Overall: Considering how bad this open mic usually goes, this was respectable. I tried some newer jokes in the middle, they have promise but need work.