0m52s More emphasis on “someone”

1m10s Get better posture, neck is too far forward

1m25s I can add “I didn’t even know the internet had other websites”

3m59s Say “it’s called the contract year” before “imagine how good marriages would be in a contract year.”

4m48s Add “accidently” before started

5m34s Change “twelve” to “ten” for less syllables

Overall: Decent for checks

0m14s Might not need to acknowledge this

0m51s More emphasis on “someone”

4m49s Good to pick one or two specific people for the batteries line

6m01s Good improvised response and good idea to ask about how long someone’s been married to go back into the bit

7m13s Say someone instead of something

7m51s I forgot a couple of lines about “if you’re lucky, life, you have a couple good orgasms then you die… Have I depressed everyone yet?” but it still sorta made sense

9m25s Harsher on “maybe”

14m03s Hit the UofP harder, like “I guess you went to…”

15m10s Smile on “basement”

15m55s Spin the media should be after bribe the jury

18m10s Weird fun interaction

18m28s Fun Q&A I guess

19m04s Compromise should go before flexible

19m27s Saying “alright” is a funny way to go into safe word

20m31s Try to have my eyes open wider when doing the grandpa character to differentiate it from the mom

21m17s Hold the smile after each line until the laughs die down, otherwise I might be stopping the laughs cause they’re waiting for the next line

21m58s I can cut the candle part

22m46s Hold for an extra half second

Overall: Great long set. I was relaxed and had fun and the material flowed.

5m53s It got enough laughs that I didn’t need to acknowledge the second round of laughs

Overall: Consistent laughs throughout, but they could’ve been stronger.

1m30s Good misinterpretation on her “excuse me”

1m51s Milk the circle motion for longer if it’s getting laughs

3m57s State that it’s called a contract year

5m03s I accidentally did this bit instead of the cell phones like marriages bit, but it actually helps break up the anti-marriage material

6m04s Have the mic in the stand before doing the one liner

Overall: Solid short set, although you can’t tell from this audio version

2m43s Pointed at a guy that was way too old to be playing Halo

5m45s Funny how they called me nerdy before I got to it

7m07s Doing this joke without doing mom act outs first is weird

7m43s Make kissing sounds

Overall: Eh. I did my smarter material on purpose and it got laughs but not huge laughs.

2m59s Instead of “it’s gonna get sadder” could’ve gone “no, it’s okay because I was actually happy about it…”

3m32s Make one of the voices masculine

4m53s Don’t put hand over face

6m52s Good that I’m trying to write on stage, even if it’s not funny

8m05s Add “I’m like” first

Overall: Mediocre set but I did a good job rolling with the punches and trying to write on stage.

1m15s Lean in harder with the mic stand

1m20s Pause longer after “I don’t pander”

5m10s Tighten this and pick one specific person for the batteries line

5m34s Do better crowd work if asking a question

Overall: Mediocre. The first two minutes went fine then I spent 4 minutes talking about why marriages are stupid. Maybe I shouldn’t start with that material two minutes into a set.

2m02s Make the circle motion slower and more deliberately

Overall: The two people who were listening laughed at most of the punch lines, everyone else ignored me more or less quietly while paying their checks.

0m27s That’s the worst this joke has done as an opener in a while

5m31s Do a slower and more purposeful circle. Better if it’s actually circular and not elliptical too.

5m59s Seem more upset

7m34s Slow down the setup even more

8m08s Try reversing the garbage and injury parts

10m33s Say “he’s singing the birthday song” so it’s clearer

Overall: Mediocre set but the new part about contract years went well.

0m01s The annoying sound in the background is the heater

4m14s Pick one specific person

7m54s Say this setup slower so everyone follows

8m05s Nice when a new line gets an applause break

8m18s Change “hurt” to “injured”

8m29s Cut or rework this last line

Overall: Decent for a small crowd and a loud heater. Nice that the new part about marriages did well.