Ben Rosenfeld - Comedian » Comedy

Performance Critique: June 23c

Ben — Tue, 20 Jul 2010 20:20:52 +0000

Music and comedy mic

1m31s Cause the guy was asian

7m07s Good job referencing previous crowd work

Part 2

0m24s Don’t say “terrible” two sentences in a row

Overall: Nice long 17 minute set with more or less steady laughs throughout

Music and comedy mic

www.youtube.com/watch?v=YDiBbXXg_5I

1m31s Cause the guy was asian

7m07s Good job referencing previous crowd work

Part 2

www.youtube.com/watch?v=UWFuyIAAimI

0m24s Don’t say “terrible” two sentences in a row

Overall: Nice long 17 minute set with more or less steady (although small) laughs throughout

Performance Critique: June 23b

Ben — Tue, 20 Jul 2010 13:19:38 +0000

A bar show

2m22s Add “because” before “Jesus would’ve wanted…”

5m44s Too wordy

6m41s Decent call back

Overall: Decent, but not great. I tried doing a lot of mom stuff in a row and it got a bit repetitive, even

for me.

A bar show

www.youtube.com/watch?v=kD8gZT4UH0k

2m22s Add “because” before “Jesus would’ve wanted…”

5m44s Too wordy

6m41s Decent call back

Overall: Decent, but not great. I tried doing a lot of mom stuff in a row and it got a bit repetitive, even for me.

Performance Critique: June 23a

Ben — Mon, 19 Jul 2010 20:17:40 +0000

An open mic

1m35s Either say “Rock and Roll” or “Heavy Metal” not both

3m03s Make an erasing the chalk board motion

3m24s The word “lie” should be last in the sentence

4m28s I need to say “comedy” before “class”

Overall: Decent for an open mic

An open mic

www.youtube.com/watch?v=6b2Xq4Umh_A

1m35s Either say “Rock and Roll” or “Heavy Metal” not both

3m03s Make an erasing the chalk board motion

3m24s The word “lie” should be last in the sentence

4m28s I need to say “comedy” before “class”

Overall: Decent for an open mic

Performance Critique: June 22

Ben — Mon, 19 Jul 2010 13:15:55 +0000

Hosting my show in Queens

3m12s Everyone turned their head so I had to call it out

4m16s Don’t say “If I wasn’t hosting I would…”

4m45s So creepy it’s funny

5m28s Get rid of the word “really” in there

5m43s Don’t say “terrible” in two examples in a row

7m29s Too wordy of a punch line

8m14s Throw in a “clap it up for young love” or something

Part 2

0m18s Working too hard for an answer that’s not even needed for the joke

2m56s Put the word “lie” last

3m22s Pick three of the four

Overall: Mediocre hosting. I could’ve done more crowd work and been higher energy.

Hosting my show in Queens

www.youtube.com/watch?v=GhI0PWqYLUU

3m12s Everyone turned their head so I had to call it out

4m16s Don’t say “If I wasn’t hosting I would…”

4m45s So creepy it’s funny

5m28s Get rid of the word “really” in there

5m43s Don’t say “terrible” in two examples in a row

7m29s Too wordy of a punch line

8m14s Throw in a “clap it up for young love” or something

Part 2

www.youtube.com/watch?v=cdy2rk2HIRw

0m18s Working too hard for an answer that’s not even needed for the joke

2m56s Put the word “lie” last

3m22s Pick three of the four

Overall: Mediocre hosting. I could’ve done more crowd work and been higher energy.

Performance Critique: June 21

Ben — Fri, 16 Jul 2010 20:14:19 +0000

Hosting a Monday show in a restaurant

0m28s Or gifts

5m40s Oppressor football is a funny statement

7m33s I didn’t handle the interruption as smoothly as possible

Part 2

Overall: I could’ve been more high energy as the MC

Hosting a Monday show in a restaurant

www.youtube.com/watch?v=I8ytdCMi6pY

0m28s Or gifts

5m40s Oppressor football is a funny statement

7m33s I didn’t handle the interruption as smoothly as possible

Part 2

www.youtube.com/watch?v=DORA2pAA9aI

Overall: I could’ve been had more energy as the MC, but I did a good job engaging them

Performance Critique: June 20

Ben — Fri, 16 Jul 2010 13:12:56 +0000

Sunday writer’s mic

0m20s Awkward pauses are funny

0m40s Instead of “do a joke about this” say “talk about this on stage”

0m58s Say “send guys to Ben’s new camp”, I missed “guys” in that setup

1m34s Don’t do the baby spleen crack analogy, HD TV is stronger

2m35s I need to start this joke with almost getting run over by a jogger

2m53s Make it more of a rock song than a rap song

Overall: Worked out some newer jokes, some have potential but they need more work

Sunday writer’s mic

www.youtube.com/watch?v=WHhSH75ERAM

0m20s Awkward pauses are funny

0m40s Instead of “do a joke about this” say “talk about this on stage”

0m58s Say “send guys to Ben’s new camp”, I missed “guys” in that setup

1m34s Don’t do the baby spleen crack analogy, HD TV is stronger

2m35s I need to start this joke with almost getting run over by a jogger

2m53s Make it more of a rock song than a rap song

Overall: Worked out some newer jokes, some have potential but they need more work

Performance Critique: June 19

Ben — Thu, 15 Jul 2010 20:12:15 +0000

Saturday 8pm show

2m42s Get rid of “the wine”

2m46s Don’t make “would you let Jesus shave you?” into a question, make it into a statement

3m41s Just say “I’ll wave my hand till you laugh”

4m10s I can stop after “weight of failed expectations” no need for “for son”

4m39s Not a strong enough of a punch

6m20s Need a better punch than “straight jacket”

Part 2

Overall: Good ten minute set, especially since I’m still figuring out a bunch of these jokes.

Saturday 8pm show

www.youtube.com/watch?v=gTkaiiPRYAA

2m42s Get rid of “the wine”

2m46s Don’t make “would you let Jesus shave you?” into a question, make it into a statement

3m41s Just say “I’ll wave my hand till you laugh”

4m10s I can stop after “weight of failed expectations” no need for “for son”

4m39s Not a strong enough of a punch

6m20s Need a better punch than “straight jacket”

Part 2

www.youtube.com/watch?v=U7j7FMkcdSk

Overall: Good ten minute set, especially since I’m still figuring out a bunch of these jokes.

Performance Critique: June 18

Ben — Thu, 15 Jul 2010 13:09:30 +0000

Friday night show

0m55s Pause another second before “maybe”

2m43s Don’t add “the wine”

5m11s Instead of “do that” say “make a website like that for”

6m46s Funny improvised statement

7m36s The biggest laugh was when it wasn’t material

7m56s Checking getting dropped towards the end of my set

Overall: Decent but not great. It started out stronger than it ended.

Friday night show

www.youtube.com/watch?v=dTgVyCnLZvI

0m55s Pause another second before “maybe”

2m43s Don’t add “the wine”

5m11s Instead of “do that” say “make a website like that for”

6m46s Funny improvised statement

7m36s The biggest laugh was when it wasn’t material

7m56s Checking getting dropped towards the end of my set

Overall: Decent but not great. It started out stronger than it ended.

Performance Critique: June 17b

Ben — Wed, 14 Jul 2010 21:09:19 +0000

A show at a Hostel, with a mostly international crowd

3m55s I need a different end to this joke

4m16s I don’t need to verify this that much

7m53s Milk the “eye fucking” line for longer

Overall: Solid set, but the Jewel joke isn’t getting enough laughs throughout the bit.

A show at a Hostel, with a mostly international crowd

www.youtube.com/watch?v=6wxczhuX69Q

3m55s I need a different end to this joke

4m16s I don’t need to verify this that much

7m53s Milk the “eye fucking” line for longer

Overall: Solid set, but the Jewel joke isn’t getting enough laughs throughout the bit.

Performance Critique: June 17a

Ben — Wed, 14 Jul 2010 17:00:52 +0000

An afternoon open mic

www.youtube.com/watch?v=7Yz6GK_vGIc

1m35s I didn’t set up this joke enough, it doesn’t make sense

4m14s Not sure if that’s too far

4m22s At least I admit it

Overall: Considering how bad this open mic usually goes, this was respectable. I tried some newer jokes in the middle, they have promise but need work.